I am currently taking a class called Strategic Presentation in Online Methods. This is the class that made me create this blog in the first place so lucky you. Anyway, we all had to write a midterm analyzing aspects of our blog and the strategies used when appealing to our audience. My Professor was going over the language we used in our midterms and explained that our writing styles were sometimes too informal for a collegiate essay. In order to teach us how to write in an ‘expert’ voice, she used the following examples to grab our attention in class and I must say, it was a very effective strategy on her part. Please keep in mind that she came up with all of these examples and they speak for themselves in terms of how cool she is. Professor, if you’re reading this, (which she probably will since part of our grade revolves around our blogs) I am requesting an A in your class. Doesn’t hurt to ask right? Please keep in mind that these notes are taken from the exact word document she was using in class.
Colloquial Language: Slang/Terminology of a specific field
Informal: My blog is about how people turn up in the club.
Formal: My blog is about how people consume alcoholic beverages in social settings.
This blog is written for people who consume alcoholic beverages in social settings and share their experiences on social media.
When you provide a critique, explain your position.
Informal: I went to a club on George Street that was ratchet and ridiculous. So I said, “Bye Felicia” and left for another club that was kray kray.
Formal: First, I must define ratchet in order to analyze my experience. According to Urbandictionary.com, ratchet means a diva mostly from urban cities who exaggerates inner-city behavior in social settings. However, my definition of ratchet is behaving inappropriately because anyone can be ratchet even my professor, Professor Shivers.